Revising

Once you have drafted your final paper, you need to make revision decisions that suit your own essay, your thesis, purpose, etc. In addition, you need to provide sufficient support for your topic sentences, mainpoints, and thesis. Paragraph structure and coherence are critical to the success of this essay

Characteristics of an Essay

Global Issues (global referring to the entire text)


Thesis statement A claim is a debatable thesis statement.

Purpose

Audience

Tone

Missing papers

Some folks are missing papers and due dates on the timeline. Be aware that the final grade may be pass/fail, but all papers are required to pass the course.

In-class "exit" essay topic

In this assignment, you will develop a 3-page “case study” of an effective teacher. Instead of developing a caricature, however, you will examine the life and work of a real person and teacher—a teacher who has had you in his/her classroom. Discuss a teacher you have worked with during your primary or secondary education. Include detailed description of her/his character traits, actions, and assignments as you believe are relevant to his/her success as a teacher. Ask yourself, why did s/he reach me? Compare this teacher to those who did not motivate you or who could not keep you awake, etc. Each trait or part of your definition must be developed with examples of this teacher in action. Recreate interactions between students and teacher. Remember, words like “good,” “effective,” “well-meaning,” and “bad,” are empty without examples of what they mean to you. Because language is not transparent—speakers and hearers often misunderstand our use of even “simple” words—examples of our labels in context are essential. The reader needs to be able to develop a portrait in his/her mind. Think, label, and show.

How to write a press release

This is one of the nicer links I found while researching.

draft letter of thanks

November 20, 2007
Person
Address

Dear Mr./Ms./Dr. ______ :
On behalf of my classmates and professor, I want to thank you for your support of….your participation in…your stuff for… “A Day with the Grizzlies.” WHY YOU ARE WRITING TO THEM, YOUR PURPOSE
The Alcott Elementary School 5th graders had a . . . . . .. the teachers were pleased with the entire.. . . .all the children want to go to OU now. DETAILS, EXAMPLES, HOW THEIR HELP MADE A DIFFERENCE IN THE DAY. (MIGHT BE TWO PARAGRAPHS)
Thank you and CONCLUSION
Sincerely,

Your name
Rht 102, 44244

Please email me a draft of your letter by 8pm Monday.

Thank you letters

1. Provost, Dr. Virinder Moudgil, REGGIE
2. Sadhona
a. Approvals and lunch

3. Dean, Dr. Ron Sudol, RYAN E
a. Approvals and was out of town

4. Chair, Dr. Shea Howell, RYAN E.
a. Approvals and was out of town

5. Director, Dr. Alice Horning, CHARLENE
a. Approval and she spoke with the kids.

6. Upward Bound JAIME
a. Presentation

7. Reg McCloud, JASMINE
a. Ran interference when we needed stuff

8. Cheering, ABBY
a. Grizz

9. Athletics - JESSICA
a. STUFF…lots of stuff

10.WXOU, STEPHANIE R
a. Tours, stickers, Nick.

11.Oakland Post RYAN B.
a. No response

12.Karen Lloyd - SUZANNE
a. Helpful with money ideas

13.Dawn Aubry – ANGIE K
a. Support, stuff, and came to lunch to meet the kids

14.Melinda Booth, NICOLE
a. Bags and stuff

15.Campus Police, ROB H.
a. They okayed drop off and pick up and advised us safety

16.Charter, Shannon, ROB V.
a. Arranged for the tickets and prepared the way for the cafeteria

17. Rec – Greg, apology and thank you for letting us through SUZANNE

18. Library – reference librarians SUZANNE

19. Lunch room staff, John, Jackie, Charles, Chef Jeff, ANGELA S

20. Kathy, Registrar, SUZANNE

21. Carolyn ran to fix everything MARISSA

22. Becky STEPHANIE F.

23. Disability Services, wheel services, DEVIN

Well, that was a MAJOR success...

The children are safely returned to Alcott and had a wonderful time.

The day was terrific for all of us, and I thought we should share here what our thoughts are. What is your favorite moment? What was the funniest moment? What made you the most proud to bring the children to OU?

Abstract Assessment form

Abstract Assessment

To achieve a 2.0 to 2.9, an abstract must meet the following criteria:
A. Content and Organization
1. The abstract must have an introduction that
a. states the author(s) full name(s);
b. puts the title of the original text in quotation marks;
c. gives the source if necessary;
d. summarizes the thesis of the original text;
e. presents background information that puts the text in context.
2. Body for the abstract should
a. accurately reflect the main ideas of the original;
b. include the main points;
c. be brief, leaving out concrete detail;
d. not use more than three words in a row without quotation marks;
e. not include any personal reaction, opinion, or judgment.
B. Punctuation and Format
1. The abstract is reasonably free of distracting punctuation errors—fragments, comma spices, run-ons.
2. The abstract is reasonably free of distracting spelling and usage errors.
3. It follows the correct format, including an MLA citation for the original text.
4. It is approximately 75-150 words.
The abstract achieves these goals: _____yes _____partly ______no


To achieve a 3.0 to 3.4, the abstract must also meet the following criteria:
1. The abstract is outstanding in comprehension of the original text.
2. Each sentence follows logically from the one that comes before it.
3. The words substituted for the originals make sense although some awkwardness may exist.
4. The abstract maintains present tense consistently.
The abstract achieves these goals: _____yes _____partly ______no


To achieve a 3.5 to 4.0, the abstract must also meet the following criteria:
1. Someone who has not read the original text would understand the abstract easily.
2. The sentence structures are varied, and the language and ideas flow from sentence to sentence.
3. When finding new ways to express original ideas, the abstract writer has avoided clumsy sentences and awkward language usage.
4. The ideas in the original text have been reorganized to make the abstract easier to understand.
The abstract achieves these goals: _____yes _____partly ______no

Making final plans for "the Day": 11/13

On Tuesday, 11/13, we will be running errands, assembling goody bags, finalizing tour details, and completing the editing of the agenda.

5th graders arrive about 9:50
and they MUST be on the bus at 1.

At 10am, Dr. Horning will welcome them, and someone from admissions may as well. Then off to SFH, by way of NFH and those highlights, for the Upward Bound presentation.

10:35 - tour of buildings.

Still waiting on confirmation of athlete/mascot availability, if they will be present for lunch, or how that will work.

We need to be at Devin's room by 11:50 to check out his place. Then to lunch where the kids can pick out what they want.

Finally, WE are not free. If you have a meal plan, you're set. If not and you want to eat with the kids, it's 7.42. Sorry, didn't get enough money for us too. I think I will eat afterwards, so I can talk to the children.

And the lunch verdict isssssss.....

We have FUNDING! The lunch costs are higher than predicted, and I was worried. But the Provost values what you are doing (what you will learn and how it contributes to the community) so highly that he has agreed to fund the entire meal for the kids. (We still need to get our own ;) )

We will, of course, need to send a great big thank you. AND we will need to write a formal explanation of how the money was used, why, and what learning outcomes and benefits you all gained.

A Day with the Grizzlies: Update 11/09

Exciting news!!!

First, I spoke with the cheering coach and Grizz will likely be available to us on Thursday; in fact, it is a good thing to assume his presence. YAY! Also, she is going to schedule some of the cheerleaders to be present.

Second, stuff, we got stuff. The Athletics Office comes through with support for us again. I will get a call on Monday to confirm a pick up time.

Third, lunch news. I am investigating options for lunch. More on that a bit later. What do you think about ending in the Rec. Center if I can get a room for lunch there? Then maybe Grizz can hang out longer?

Fourth, Jerry Graham from Upward Bound will speak with the children in South Foundation Hall for a 15 minute PowerPoint presentation by Ms. Graham. This way, the children actually SIT in college seats and learn about a college entrance program they could potentially join.

Fifth, we will need to adjust the tentative agenda to reflect Dr. Horning's welcome remarks, our time with Ms. Graham.

Finally, I am speaking with individuals from the Oakland Post and the radio station. We'll see what we can work out there.

abstract notes from class 11/8 (scruffy notes)

Ryan Byrne
Drapeau
Rht 102: 44244
8 November 2007

Nguyen, Dung. “The True Purpose of College and Higher Education.” Delta Winds: A Magazine
of Student Essays: 2000. 2 Oct. 2007 <
http://www.deltacollege.edu/org/deltawinds/DWOnline00/thetruepurposeofcollege.html> .

In “The True Purpose of College and Higher Education,” Dung Nguyen …thesis
Context: A student at _______ University…
Body of abstract would follow. Mass production in higher education, lack of learning for the sake of knowledge, explores factors impacting college students in the 21st century. Compares modern educational institutions to ancient educational systems provided for the privileged few.

Ryan Byrne
Drapeau
Rht 102: 44244
8 November 2007

Sinatra, Andrew. “The Purpose of College.” The Primary Source: 2005. 2 Oct. 2007
http://tuftsprimarysource.org/?p=204 .

Andrew Sinatra defines three reasons for attending college in “The Purpose of College.” Context??? Presented at commencement at Tufts University Enrich the mind. Get your ass a job. Fun stuff. Sinatra uses slang, humor, and personal experience to support his ideas.

"A Day with the Grizzlies" agenda

Welcome to Oakland University, “A Day with the Grizzlies”
Agenda
9:30-10 – Register: pick up welcome bag, name tag, meet Grizzly buddy.
9:50 – Welcome message from
10 – 12 – Campus Tour
Wilson Hall – OU Art Gallery, Meadowbrook Theater, President’s Office, and Provost’s Office.
North Foundation –Academic Skills Center, Admission, Disability Services, Center for Multicultural Initiatives, lecture hall.
Oakland Center – Bookstore, Bumper Game Room, WXOU, Tech Center, Student Congress, Dean of Students, and Pioneer Food Court.
Kresge Library – Joan Rosen Writing Center, computer labs, government documents, encyclopedias, study area, reference librarian desk. (2nd floor)
Recreational Center – exercise rooms, pool, racquetball courts, basketball court/indoor track.
Dodge Hall – classrooms, labs,
And campus view between Dodge and Science and Engineering Building.
Graham Health Center – between Wilson Hall and Vandenburg, Graham offers medical care, both physical and mental health.
Vandenburg Dormitory Room – thanks, Devin.
Vandenburg Cafeteria.
12 – 1 – Lunch
1:15 – Departure Time

Boyle, Jamison, Trimble

Who is Kevin Boyle? Who is Kay Jamison? Who is John Trimble?

Post some credible links. What is in the link?

what have you done for "A Day with the Grizzlies"?

Post your updates about tour ideas and other plans for the 15th.

Please hand in

a blank tape with your Collage Essay.

almost final draft of email to president

Dear Russi,

We, Suzanne Drapeau’s Rht 102 students, are planning a “Day with the Grizzlies” for Alcott Elementary fifth graders on November 15, 2007.

We are planning the entire event: coordinating multiple sections of rhetoric, as well as students, faculty and staff from Alcott; organizing and preparing a campus tour; and sharing our college experience with the children. This is allowing us to develop our creativity, leadership skills, and organization

In addition, we are gaining individual and collaborative writing skills. The writing thus far has helped build audience awareness, mechanics, and style. We are getting real-world experience with brainstorming, drafting, revising, and editing texts for various audience.

Our project furthers the University’s mission statement to “render significant public service” and supports the President’s effort for the Michigan Campus Compact. Therefore, this project creates opportunities for reflection, not only on writing skills, but also personal growth and community involvement.
Please join us for lunch at noon in Vandenberg cafeteria on the 15th.
Respectfully,
Rht 102, section 44244